Originally posted by ToddI don't think this is enough to give us, honestly. One picture of what the front of the story looks like doesn't really give people a good idea of the story itself.
Wny don't you take some time to write some of the story out? Entice people in with the story itself, not just a picture of it. If you do that, I'm sure you will have a lot of people's attention!
Jeje!! You gave me the chance to be able to Repost!! Thank you for that!!
NOW here is the beggining of the story:
PROLOGUE:
In a normal room, a young man is resting after finishing his chores. "Alright! Now that I have time, I guess I can continue writing my comic!" said the young man, whose name is Rafael. However, he soon finds out he lacks of something very important for working in his comic: inspiration.
"Oh, why can't I inspire anymore? I have like almost a year with this mental blocking. Maybe I should give up already, what gives..." said in a very defeated way. However, while he was at this, a mysterious figure poped out of nowhere and stole something very important for Rafael: his comic notebook. But Rafael noticed the figure just as it was escaping by the front door. "Hey, you!! Come back here with my notebook! Is mine!" he shouted as he run after it. He followed the figure all the way until it dissapeared inside a weird portal. "Ok! I'm not that dumb, said Rafael, its obviously a very bad idea to get in there. I rather return home and make is if this never happ....Aaaaaaaaah!!!!" He didn't finished the sentence, because when he was heading back, he triped with a rope in the floor and fell into the portal.
He woke up in a place he never saw before. "What the heck is this place?, he said, It looks like were I live, except the sky is purple, trees are blue and.... ARE THOSE MUSICAL NOTES WALKING RIGHT THERE?!"
Obviously, were he was now was a very special place. So he decided to take a walk to see the place... and maybe find a way home.
He didn't walked for too long when he found a very weird, black creature. "Now, what in this or any world is this thing?" he said as he touched it. Big mistake. The thing was not only alive, it was also angry at him. And to make matters worse, it called several of others like it; and all jumped in an attacking way to Rafael.
He closed his eyes, but he soon found out he was ok. He opened up and got surprised. In front of him was a girl with pinklish-red hair in two ponytails, clothes that looked like armor, and weilding a shield that also looked like an eraser. "Sherry! What are you doing? We have to continue." shouted a mysterious voice. Rafael turned to see who shouted and his surprise was huge! A Yoshi!! Exactly like the ones from Super Mario videogames, only that wearing blue beret and cape. "Wow! What happened here?" said the yoshi. "Some skratches appeared, I went here to see them and find this guy in trouble, so I blocked them" said the girl, whom Rafael deduced was called Sherry. "We can't just leave him here, specially with this Skratches wanting to attack again. I guess we can deal with them." said the yoshi.
Two of the "Skratches" jumped to attack, but were repeled by Sherr'y odd looking shield. Meanwhile, the yoshi pointed with what it seemed a giant brush at some Skratches; and from the brush came out something that looked like fire.
Rafael was surprised, and kind of pleased that these two strangers were protecting him. Sadly, because they were very busy, they didn't saw a stray Skratch, who jumped from nowhere and landed on top of Rafael. "Dang, I got distracted!" said the yoshi. "Oh no, is he going to get delated?" said Sherry. "Yes, but only after all his creativity is drained." noded the yoshi. Efectively, Rafael felt he was fading. He could only think: "So this is it? This is how it all ends? In a place that I don't know, attacked by this creatures? And all I wanted was to retrieve my notebook... !!!!!!!!!!!! My notebook!! All the work
I did is going to lose? No! I wont let it happen!!!!
Sherry and the yoshi saw amazed as a very bright light glowed and the Skratche that jumped on Rafael got vaporized. And how other Skratches jumped to attack too, but got cutted in half. After that, they saw really amazed at Rafael. "Oh my good! What does this mean'" asked Sherry. "It means things just got interesting" answered the yoshi, as they saw how Rafael wielded a sword that also looked like a pencil. "He has the power of the PencilSword."
"Ok, I guess all this deserves an explanation, said the yoshi, but first, I think we should do the introductions. You first."
"Um, ok, my name is Rafael, you can call me that or Ralph." said Rafael. "Hello! I'm Sharon! You can call me Sherry!" said Sherry. "And I'm the great Cid of the Yoshis! You should call me Cid of the Yoshis!" said... um... Cid of the Yoshis...
"..." Rafael didn't knew what to say. "Just call him Cid" said Sherry. "Oh! Ok! Hello, Sherry and Cid!" finally said Rafael.
Cid (we will call him only Cid for the good of this story) wasn't really happy about this, but continued: "You may want to know what is this place. Well, this world is called Creatiria, and is the world all things people in your world creat with your imagination. All those things; drawings, writings, sculptures, even computer programs, all exist here."
Rafael said: "Well, this really doesn't hear real; but I guess watchers believers. However, I don't want to be a bad guy or something, but how can I return home? Because I didn't brought my ruby shoes." "Um, we have kind of a problem in this world right now." mentioned Cid. "You see, those creatures that attacked you are called Skratches. They are anti-creativity creatures who exist to drain creativity from people of your world. Normally, this is something temporary, you call it "mental blocks". However, since a villian guy called Lord Kuldren started using their power to conquer this world, any person whose creativity is drained, never gets it back. Actually, he has gone too far away, stealing the creations from your world."
"Wait a minute!" shouted Rafael. Then continued: "That's how I got here. Something, maybe a Skratch, stole my notebook were I draw. So these means that Lord Kuldren has it?" "Well, yes" said Sherry. "Ok, so now tell me: were is that guy so I can change his face?" said Rafael. "Jo jo! is not so simple. You see, Lord Kuldren is incredibly powerful. He has brought destruction to our worlds. And only if he is defeated, you can take it back. Luckily for you, you now have the power of the PencilSword, one of the legendary weapons of this world. If you could help us defeat Lord Kuldren, you can take your stuff back" said Cid.
"Guess that makes us a team, then. We will defeat Lord Kuldren!" exclaimed Rafael. "Yay!" aded Sherry. "Good, so we can get going now. Don't worry too much. I'm sure we will be fine. Now, let's move!" ended Cid.
And the story began.
And here are the characters thus far:
Full Name: Rafael Echeverría Aranda (myself)
Nicknames: Ralph
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Birthday: 03/02 (day/month)
Race or Species: Human
Abilities: None, but discovers he is the master of the Legendary Weapon the PencilSword. He later learns a bit of Imaginum Powers.
Occupation: University student.
Eyes: Black
Hair: Black
Skin: Light Coastal
Height: 1.70 m
Weight: 80 kg
Likes: Videogames, reading, drawing comics.
Dislikes: Doing Sports
Strengths: Good Balance of Strenght and Dexterity
Weaknesses: Not good at Imaginum Power
Personality: Inteligent, Persevering, Kind-hearted, Somehow grumpy, Pesimist, A bit coward.
Bio: Rafael is a student who likes making comics in his free time. However, he recently is having trouble in thinking something new and wonders if he should quit. Howerver, when his notebook is stolen, he chases the thive right into a portal which takes him to Creatiria. There, he meets the Drawing Forces and learns Lord Kuldren (the evil mind) is causing trouble and he has his notebook. Rafael joins the Drawing forces to retrieve his notebook and save the world.
This are other important characters in the story:
Full Name: Cid of the Yoshis (Cid Yoshi)
Nicknames: Cid
Gender: Male
Age: 25
Birthday: 03/02 (day/month)
Race or Species: Yoshi
Abilities: Master of Imaginum Power (offensivly and support). Wields the Brush Staff
Eyes: Black
Hair: None. Uses a blue beret and a blue cape
Skin: Darkish green
Height: 1.25 m
Weight: 60 kg
Likes: Serving his kingdom, relaxing when having time
Dislikes: Dumb sayings, Evil
Strengths: Powerful Imaginum Power
Weaknesses: Not good at melee
Personality: Very inteligent, Grumpy, Very chivalrous
Bio: Cid of the Yoshis (just call him Cid) was a Council member of the Creatiria Kingdom. Lord Kuldren's actions destroyed everything Cid cared of. Moved more for justice rather than revange, Cid makes with sister-like friend Sherry the Drawing Forces (only they are members) to stop Kuldren.
Full Name: Sharon Regil
Nicknames: Sherry
Gender: female
Age: 18
Birthday: 09/07 (day/month)
Race or Species: Drawn human
Abilities: Very good at defending. Good at melee combat
Eyes: Green
Hair: Red, almost pink
Skin: White
Height: 1.50 m
Weight: 65 kg
Likes: Daydreaming, Learn about the real world
Dislikes: Scratches
Strengths: Great defense and good Strenght
Weaknesses: Zero Imaginum Power
Personality: Daydreamer, Sweet, Optimist, Very occurrent
Bio: Sherry was a guardian of the Creatiria Kingdom until its destruction. She joins Cid in the Drawing Forces to help stop Kuldren. She is the one who finds and helps Rafael when he arrives. She really cares and admires Cid, whom she sees as a bigger brother. She seems to have a crush on Rafael. Her personality actually covers a harsh past.
The fourth one you see in the front will be explained later in Chapter 1.
EDIT OF THE VERSION 2.0
I decided to include an image of something from the chapter, or in this case, prologue. Here it is the one from here: